:D Thanks so much! Glad you feel I'm getting the different perspectives right; part of my goal (in addition to learning to write short) was to try and practice how different characters view things. And yeah, Flynn's the most moronic genius ever.

If you're interested in more, I wound up putting it on ff.net... and turning it into a growing thing (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7266059/1/Lines_of_Code). There are six (counting these) there currently, more likely to come soon.